Ashley Levesque

Revision Planning

ENG110l

  1. I am working well explaining discourses and including information about Gee. I can apply more information about Gee’s discourses to help transition in to Haas’ experiment with Eliza.
  2. I am doing a good job bringing in pieces of language about discourses in my first body paragraph where I discuss Gee and his theory of discourses. It is working well because I am already aware of Gee and his theory of discourses therefore I understand it well enough to write about it.
  3. A paragraph that isn’t working well for me is my last body paragraph where I discuss Haas. I feel it is not working because the information I provided does not relate well with the topic of the paper which is IMRaD. I think to improve this I need to find good quotes I can relate to IMRaD and build off of those.
  4. I believe my analysis is explaining how the IMRaD sheet is important in order to enter a science discourse because without knowing how to write scientifically you cannot be classified as part of the science discourse. Also it shows that perhaps if Eliza were to use the sheet initially she would have understood how to write scientifically sooner.